I admired this timepiece the moment I set eyes on it at an old antique shop.
“He will love it,” I thought as I observed the craftsmanship, hoping to gift it to my husband.
But two things seemed odd here. First, there was no price tag on it. Second, the watch was set at around 3 minutes to 6 and that made me wonder.
I went to the old shop assistant and enquired about the price.”It is priceless,” she said. I said I wanted to buy it.
“Well, then take it for free,” she said mysteriously. I heard her mumbling, “The watch has chosen you. Good luck to you.”
I had an eerie feeling as I reached my car. I checked time on my phone. It was 2 minutes to 6.
I could hear two distinct sounds now – tick tick from the timepiece and thud thud from my heart! I felt I needed to make a decision…!
This is my entry to the flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers hosted by the lovely Priceless Joy. We are given a photo prompt and approximately 75-175 words with which to create our stories. This challenge is open to all who would like to participate. Please CLICK HERE for more. Thank you Louise for the image!
Shivangi!
This was something amazing.
As I started to read I slowly went into it and was caught in it.
I will tell you how- The other day I bought a same type of an antique piece with a compass made in London in 1897, of course for a price. While reading this I was feeling proud about the possession as I came down reading it – Oh! no this a fiction writing. Priceless Joy has made me feel like that so many times. Heart thud, thud, thud every time I go to her blog I have to take a long breath and make my Heart to be normal.
Very well written.
I wanted to ask you something, so many of my blogger friends are telling that they do not get to see my post on their Reader and email notifications is that the same experience with you.
Shiva
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Thanks a lot for coming over and commenting Shiva. Yes, even I am not receiving your posts. Plz check on that. I am so happy that you liked the post. Writing for PJ is always fun😀
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Shivangi
Go see what I have commented here.
https://pricelessjoy.co/2016/08/23/fffaw-the-timepiece/comment-page-1/#comment-31443
Ha Ha Ha
Shiva:-)
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Thanks a lot and what a nice coincidence that you bought an antique piece and I am writing on it😀
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Extremely well written … it’s captivating from the start with a jolting ending.
Isadora 😎
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So kind of you Isadora. I am so happy you liked it😀😀😀
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And then…….
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Hahaha… And then my imagination took a break and rigmarole begins… Thanks for stopping by…😀
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Lovely, intriguing piece. I wonder what decision she will make!
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If I were her I would get rid of the time piece. Thanks a lot for your lovely message😀
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Oh my gosh! Is the timepiece killing the narrator? Great story! Chilling!
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Thank you PJ… Perhaps the time piece suggests the time the narrator will die… But again free will is at work… May be she will survive if she lets go of the time piece. Who knows…!! Wonderful prompt!
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Oh, good questions Shivangi!
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This is fantastic, Shivangi! I really enjoyed your well-written and creative flash fiction. 😊
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Thank you Tonya… Glad you enjoyed😀😀😊
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😊🌻
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Wow Shivangi this is quite absorbing…what is the significance of the time??
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Thanks a lot Michael. I guess the timepiece is showing the time of death of the narrator. But her mind believes it to be a superstition while heart wants to get rid of the timepiece…she has a decision to make!
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A very intriguing story! Why did the watch choose her and what will happen…good things or bad things? I hope she made the right choice. And, I think if I were her, I would stay away from antique shops after that….assuming things go well. 🙂
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Hahaha… True. Even I would get rid of the watch. Thanks a lot for coming over😀😀😀
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Any time “something has chosen you” it’s time to walk away, I feel 🙂
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Right Ali… We should run the other way! Thanks a lot for your comment😀
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Eerie leaves one wondering what’s up with that watch and what is going to happen, good stuff!
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Thanks a lot Joy😀😀😀
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Excellent – as always. 🙂
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Big thank you YS! 🙂
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Beautiful fiction , so crisp and intriguing !😊
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Glad you liked it. Thank you!
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Phir kya hua?Story kadam?
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Haan phir Puzzle… Sochte raho…:)
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An intriguing story, Shivangi. I wonder what she has been chosen for, and just what decision she has to make… Nicely done. 🙂
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Thank you Louise… I loved the picture prompt, thank you for sharing it😀
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I’m glad you liked it, Shivangi. It’s been sat in a folder on my computer for a long time now, so it’s nice for it to be seen. 🙂
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Ehen! What happened?
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Hahaha… I think she threw the watch and drove away… and then exactly at 3 minutes to 6 something happened…she woke up, it was all a bad dream. And then she remembered, she had to visit an antique store to pick up a watch… the rigmarole begins. Hahahaha.. Thanks a lot for stopping by😀
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Brilliant
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Hey Nimi… How have you been? Thanks a lot😀
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All good Shivangi
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I like this. You should check out some of the stuff I’ve written about on my blog, I’d love to hear what you think. 🙂
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Thank you and sure I will, right away! 😀😀😀
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